Hakaisha Noel, The Avenging Angel

[Upright Angel NPC]

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Character Information

Name(Meaning): Noel (French: Christmas) Hakaisha (Japanese: Destroyer)

Age (generation): Parent Generation

Lineage: First Souke of Kouryuu

Relatives: Hakaisha Habashi (wife: deceased), Hakaisha Abbadon (eldest son), Hakaisha Westin (youngest son), Solomon Kouken (grandson)

Ranks/Titles: (In Ningenkai) Azrael

Realm: (Before Death) Heaven

Pacts: Had a Complete Pact with Chaos

Special Abilities:
- Because of his personal fixation on fire, Noel molded his chaos magic so that his attacks took on the visual appearance of flames.

Allegience: Heaven

Race: Archangel

Birthdate: Never cared to translate to Mortal calendar

Birthplace: Shichisou

Sexuality: Heterosexual

Significant Other: Hakaisha Habashi (deceased)

Personality: Noel was calm, caring and concerned individual. He knew to separate business from his life with his family. He believed in justice and honor, both on the job in the Ningenkai and in Heaven; a trait he made sure to pass on to his first born son.

History:
Noel was created by the Shijin Kouryuu during the creation of angels. Fully accepting the element of Chaos as his own, he was granted with a weapon by the Shijin to symbolize the unity of the Hakaisha line and the Beast God, called the Sword of Darkness.

Noel's assignment as an Archangel was to report to the Ningenkai to aid human development where he felt fit. During this, he would repeatedly send his aid in times of war and suffering, helping the side of the persecuted by unleashing his chaotic fury. To humans, he was looked at as Azrael, the Avenging Angel.

It was during his mortal visits when his control over Chaos was eventually mastered. He formed a bond with the Chaotic spirit named Devlin. He trained for a prolonged period of time to hone his skills channel the Spirit's energy, and as a result of practicing in the same location repeatedly, the sprite named Roiyaru was born; Devlin helped Noel sculpt the sprite's appearance, and Roiyaru became one of the first sprites in the form of a Mortal Realm animal (a canine).

Soon after he became satisfied with his abilities as a Chaos wielder Noel met Habashi, whom he fell in love with and took as his wife. It was soon after that the Beast God Kouryuu was imprisoned due to his own chaos magic driving him completely insane. Afraid that his new family would become persecuted because of this, they went into hiding in the sixth layer, which eventually became their home.

During their hiding, Noel was pleased to find out that Habashi was pregnant with their first child. Through this knowledge, Noel commanded Roiyaru that in the case of his death, he would bond with his first born. That first born would be later named Hakaisha Abbadon.

Once Abbadon was born, Noel started to slowly yet surely become involved with the politics of Heaven, once it was safe for them to emerge. By the time Abbadon was of rightful age and joined the ranks of Heaven's army and his wife was pregnant with his second child, Noel learned an awful truth about one of the Heavenly Kings Mikage Tsubasa, and her plot to rule all of Heaven.

Noel could not stand for this. He retaliated against her plans with all the aid he could muster, until one fateful day when a hitman for Tsubasa invaded their home. Noel immediately ordered Roiyaru to take his son to safety as he stayed and fought the adversary.

It wasn't until he became distracted by noticing his wife Habashi watching in fear after awaking from a nap when his life came to an end by the hitman, lying on the floor watching as the hitman approached his wife.

He could see that as he laid dying Habashi started to contract, telling Noel that his second child was about to be birthed. He just wished it was under better circumstances. However, Noel was unaware that the hitman did not kill Habashi after his death. Because of this, Noel's last words before his final breath were, "I'm sorry."

Strengths: His strength was in his family and with the Beast God Kouryuu, believing in loyalty and honor within the two.

Weaknesses: His weaknesses resided in his caring nature, shown through his situations during his trips to the Ningenkai under order from Heaven and with his family.

Most honorable deed: Aiding in the development of mortals on the Ningenkai, releasing vengeance and justice where it was deserved.

Most dishonorable deed: Immediately taking his family into hiding after finding out that Kouryuu was imprisoned by the other Shijin.

Likes: Honor, Loyalty, Family, Patriotism, Self-Awareness

Dislikes: Bigotry, Traitors, Mongers of any nature, Political Greed

Aspirations: To help sustain the original order of Heaven and keeping it incorruptible, seeing nothing else in it but perfection.

Appearence:

Character Claim: Asato Tsuzuki from "Descendants of Darkness"

Picture:

[Sanada Tomo]

Mar 17, 2009 22:30:57 GMT -4 Upright Angel NPC said:

Age (generation): 1st Generation

If you're created by a Shijin, then that makes you part of the Parent Generation. Please, take a look at the timeline so that you can get your information straight.

Special Abilities:
- Noel had the ability to convert his chaos magic into any elemental form he wanted. But through this, he found controlling chaos through the form of fire most adequate.

I have a problem with the phrasing "into any elemental form he wanted". In any case, the form that he used his magic in does not have to be listed.

Personality: Noel was calm and controlling. His practice under Chaotic magic made him immune to insanity, but also amplified his relentlessness. Whenever dealing with an opponent, whether it had been Celestial or Mortal, he would be known to extend no mercy for his opponent, thus keeping any built-up sympathy to express for his family awaiting him.

You can't circumvent the effects of an element on a person. He can't be "immune" to insanity. He can have never succumbed to it, but making yourself immune to the affects of an element when you are bonded with a spirit is impossible.

And BTW, I really don't like the last sentence. It's on par with movie characters who "kill by day, make love to their girlfriends by night". It's not just really logical. If you're cold to your opponents, I doubt that he was really that loving a person. You might be a little better, but you can't just switch coldness off, not when it's part of your personality.

It was during his mortal visits when his control over Chaos was immediately mastered. Not only did he form a bond with the Chaotic spirit named Devlin, but through the combination of his own chaotic magic, Devlin's magic and the chaotic ability of the Sword of Darkness, Noel created the sprite Roiyaru; a canine with abilities every other chaotic user could dream of.

First note: That you can't "create" a sprite. A sprite can spawn from residual magic left over from an attack. Yes, Devil could use Noel to make a sprite, but I'm just not willing to credit him with the creation here, sorry. Also, I don't think that you should describe Roiyaru as "a canine with abilities every other chaotic user could dream of". Please change that.

Once Abbadon was born, Noel started to slowly yet surely become involved with the politics of Heaven, once it was safe for them to emerge. By the time his first born son Abbadon was a toddler and his wife was pregnant with his second child, Noel learned an awful truth about one of the Heavenly Kings Mikage Tsubasa, and her plot to rule all of Heaven.

When we discussed this, I believe that Abbadon was an adult by this time. He would have to be for it to fall in line with the timeline, especially given Abbadon and Noel's ages.

Most dishonorable deed: Immediately taking his family into hiding after finding out that Kouryuu had gone insane and imprisoned by the other Shijin.

I've changed the information about Kouryuu so that he didn't "go insane". Please change this.

[Upright Angel NPC]

Everything that you found a problem with I modified. Please let me know if you find anything else wrong.

[Sanada Tomo]

I have re-written two portions of your profile to fit what I was trying to get you to do without my help. I changed your "Special Abilities" section, and your "History" section. Here are the re-written versions:

"Special Abilities:
- Because of his personal fixation on fire, Noel molded his chaos magic so that his attacks took on the visual appearance of flames."

Here's what I changed from the "History" section:

"It was during his mortal visits when his control over Chaos was eventually mastered. He formed a bond with the Chaotic spirit named Devlin. He trained for a prolonged period of time to hone his skills channel the Spirit's energy, and as a result of practicing in the same location repeatedly, the sprite named Roiyaru was born; Devlin helped Noel sculpt the sprite's appearance, and Roiyaru became one of the first sprites in the form of a Mortal Realm animal (a canine).

Soon after he became satisfied with his abilities as a Chaos wielder Noel met Habashi, whom he fell in love with and took as his wife."

As far as the rest of your profile goes, I still have a problem with the inconsistency between Noel and Westin's profile.

In Westin's profile, you state that Noel is killed by a hitman. This is consistent with what you have in this profile. However, you also say in Westin's profile that his mother died three minutes after giving birth. That's not substantiated here at all.

Once Abbadon was born, Noel started to slowly yet surely become involved with the politics of Heaven, once it was safe for them to emerge. By the time Abbadon was of rightful age and joined the ranks of Heaven's army and his wife was pregnant with his second child, Noel learned an awful truth about one of the Heavenly Kings Mikage Tsubasa, and her plot to rule all of Heaven.

Noel could not stand for this. He retaliated against her plans with all the aid he could muster, until one fateful day when a hitman for Tsubasa invaded their home. Noel immediately ordered Roiyaru to take his son to safety as he stayed and fought the adversary. It wasn't until he became distracted by noticing his wife Habashi watching in fear after awaking from a nap when his life came to an end by the hitman, lying on the floor watching as the hitman approached his wife. His last words before his final breath were, "I'm sorry."

That does not explain at all about how Westin was born or how that relates to when Noel was killed.

I have moved Westin's profile to the accepted board already, because there were no details about Habashi to confuse people reading. However, if you feel the need to edit that portion of his profile, I can move it back to the "New Character Board" if necessary for you.

[Hakaisha Abbadon]

What I was trying to imply was that whereas the Hitman killed Noel, he did not kill Habashi -- who at the time of his death was going into labor with Westin. I probably should have written that in Noel's history straight-forward instead of trying to make it sound dramatic. Sorry...

Anyway, you don't have to move Westin's profile back; I'll just state that she was in labor with Westin on the day of Noel's murder in his History. If I do that, would that substantiate itself?

[Upright Angel NPC]

Okay, I modified the history so that it states that Habashi was going into labor with Westin as he was about to die. Please let me know if there's anything else I need to fix.