Youjin Enzeru - Servant to Shirogane Setsuna

[Youjin Enzeru]

Name: DC

Age:19

Website: z11.invisionfree.com/Antimony_Kriyon/index.php?act=idx

Contact Information [AIM,YIM etc.]: (On profile)

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Character Information

Name(Meaning): Youjin (Protecting/Guardian) Enzeru (Angel) Usually goes by the nickname DarkCloud or Dc though.

Age (generation): Late 4th Generation.

Lineage: N/A No relation to Shinjin.

Relatives: (Not blood related)Abbadon - Teacher/Father relationship

Ranks/Titles: Servant of the Shirogane family.

Realm: Currently 4th Layer of Heaven

Pacts: incomplete pact with Past

Special Abilities: Familiar with most types of weapons and many styles of hand to hand combat, but his most frequently used are Great swords and Spears and Jeet Kun Do Martial arts.

Allegience: 4th Layer, Heaven

Race: Cherub

Birthdate: June 24th

Birthplace: 4th Layer of Heaven

Sexuality: heterosexual

Significant Other: None

Personality: Youjin is very caring to those close to him and tends to be quite strict despite the fact the ones he protect are quite capable of handling themselves against others, the need for making sure they come to no injury always resides in his mind.

He was taught most of his life by Hakaisha Abbadon and shares many personality traits with him.

History: Youjin was first known to another by the name of ‘Dark Cloud’ a name he earned for being an angel seen always appearing from the dark clouds before the rain, he was known by this too a few and most notably Hakaisha Abbadon who took him on as a pupil at first the relationship was non existant but evolved slowly too the point where they thought of each other as practically Father and Son.

He soon returned to the 4th Layer of Heaven to Shirogane Setsuna’s services now stronger and more capable in his mind and body to protect her and her Daughter as much as he could also if needed to do tasks for them.

After the wedding incident Youjin stuck close to the Shirogane family as if an attack can happen at a guarded wedding it could happen at anytime, soon after this the Celestial Kings of Heaven made their way into Hell and he went along with Setsuna to aid in anyway he could, this ended with him retreating the battle back to the fourth layer.

Soon when Setsuna returned he knew that his strength wasn't enough to protect and serve in which he gained taking a breif holiday to train his mind and body, over a few years he returned to the fourth layer his apperance different almost younger then before, he had spent his time travelling the realms that he could go to learning as much as possible whilst training.

Strengths: Cool headed, intelligent, Kind hearted.

Weaknesses: Thinks too much, Likes to test opponents strengths.

Most honorable deed: Helping a creature named Abbadon who was turned human and never used his heart over years he grew close to Abbadon at first being a student to a teacher and slowly turning into the child that his teacher never had giving him a reason to use his heart.

Most dishonorable deed: Leaving the side of his Master when he knew she could be hurt at anytime due to the situation, he had already been injured by opponents far stronger then himself and was well aware the difference in level between himself and the enemies that stood opposite him, eventually bought back to Setsuna and forced to retreat so that he could live another day rather then die protecting her, he sat in wait for her return ready to commit Seppku if she returned injured or dead.

Likes: Sparring, Helping others, Watching the sunrise.

Dislikes: Shallow people, Suck-ups, Those who may commit harm to the Shirogane family or those weaker then themselves.

Aspirations: Too see the Shirogane family live a long and happy life and too be there to protect them at all time.

Appearence: Youjin wears dark clothing most of the time and had long red hair which contrasts his eyes, he tends to carry a sword on him at all time.

Character Claim: Asch the Bloody - Tales of the Abyss.

Picture:

[Isurugi Mei]

I have no problems with this profile. Accepted!!!

[Sanada Tomo]

You're slipping, Mei! I know that you're an old friend and all, DC, and I'm eager for you to RP as well, but there are some things that need to be changed/settled, or added to your profile.

First: it takes life times literally to become skilled in one type of weapon or hand to hand combat, let alone the concept of "them all". Can you change this to something more like

"Familiar with most types of weapons and many styles of hand to hand combat, but his most frequently used are...

and then go ahead and list at least one type of weapon that he fights with often and one martial arts type or something that that he uses frequently. This is necessary because there are specific rules for fighting now and I can't have you doing virtually impossible things just because your character "knows all types". Also, it's a frame of reference for others who RP with you, because some people here actually have experience with some weapons/martial arts.

Second: Elohim are devoid of emotion. I can't accept a character that is an Elohite, still expresses an emotion, and is still upright. It's not possible. I suggest that you either change the race of your character and have them him be "assigned" to Setsuna and grow to love her; or you can re-write all of the points that you made about emotions and him caring and loving people, including the personality, history, strengths and weaknesses, likes and dislikes, as well as allegiance and all that jazz.

Third: Actually, Enzeru is really fourth generation, if you look at the timeline. Please change that ><

Fourth: Enzeru, even with the generation change, has been on the boards for a long time, even with the absence on the RPG before now. I need you to fill out your history more to actually note what he was doing during his absence. I mean, you can make something up and say that he was on a job in the Nigenkai or he was doing paperwork in the meantime in Heaven--anything reasonable will do.

Fifth: Because I need more detail on the history, I also need more detail on the Most honorable deeds/most dishonorable deeds sections. I need to know the story behind what happened. If he feels guilty about leaving Setsuna, then please give a good reason why he had to go. As far as your most honorable deed, I'll need something more specific. A name, why this person couldn't use their heart--trauma, unlucky circumstances or something like that--and what it was that DarkCloud did to make them feel again, etc.

Sixth: This isn't really an issue at all, but I love Asch--I'll have lots of fun coming up with your background! ^_^

[Youjin Enzeru]

1 - Edited 2 weapons 1 martial art
2 - Changed, Is Paladin ok?
3 - I knew I was wrong somewhere >.<
4 - Added missing bits, detail
5 - Added more detail
6 - Hehe it took me ages to find a pic and I settled on him ^^

[Sanada Tomo]

1 - thank you very much

2 - All of the Paladim were cast down from Heaven waaaaay back before Tomo fell. I would tell you to go with the Cherubim race.

3 - I've only just recently added the generations accurately to the time line, so I'm just glad that I was able to help.

4 - Thank you.

5 - Really awesome, thank you. I wonder how Abbadon feel about that

6 - I wouldn't mind finding some other pictures of him if you like

7 - This wasn't here, before, but DarkCloud's birthday is totally the same as mine IRL. Awesomic.

After you change the race I'll move this over. Thanks for cooperating <3